Crystal Shadow

I am one person among people, My goals are still unclear, Around me the world is unstable, And the people are full of fear. As I watch they panic, And ...

Wow, I wish I could describe scenes like that. I really have to work on stuff like that. I find it hard to put everything I want in without ruining ...

Just a note before I start, but this isn't my best work. Not to mention that I practically have no Internet so I won't be able to update or answer ...

I'm not to sure about this story or what it has to do with elements. I want to say I liked it but it's to early in the story to ...

Dark fantasy, assuming this is dark fantasy, is always the best. I think I posted on the first chapter, but I can't remember.... Oh well...

Good enough excuse for me. Ten words? Wait 'til you have to memorize half the dictionary for the SAT's. But still, it would mess me up, too.

My point exactly, you spelled it loin, not lion, and that's what got me confused. The wings, however, are new to me.

I think that she tied her story with the song/poem in the beginning (the 'remembering a lost romance from long ago' part might explain Lin's reactions to the unnamed man). ...

“Listen to her, Seth.” The man speaking, burly and muscular in posture, had a girlish almost voice. His glinting underneath oily black hairr eyes showed cunning intelligence. “Listen to her ...

Thanks for explaining, and don't worry, I think I was just tired when I was reading it. The ending seemed a little blurry to me then, but now I re-read ...

All in all, this is a very good beginning. Thought out and very well written, but a silent exclamation? Do you mean a sigh? Because a silent exclamation makes no ...

True, I just want to know if she's referring to them as Archangels.

Are they giving you a hard time? They're just trying to help. Calm down (I'm not here to comment on the "u" or anything) and cut some slack on the ...

Hey, someone agrees with me! Cool! Yeah, you can tell I'm new... and tired... :lol:

If that was the end of this story then it wasn't a very good one. I think it ended a little too soon and either I'm very tired or it ...